Some people think that children should follow their parent’s advice, however, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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culture
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cultures
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, people are teaching
children
to
listen
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their
parents
.
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, It is
agured
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argued
agreed
that offspring should follow the suggestion
from
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their
parents
,
while
other
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others
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consider the drawback that they cannot learn
the
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critical thinking. In my opinion, the benefits of listening to
parents
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outweight
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outweighed
outweigh
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the downside
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downside
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, because they are experienced elder
figure
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for
youngerster
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youngsters
to learn.
Grown up
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people have been
went
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throught
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through
more
situation
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situations
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than
youngerster
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youngsters
, parent
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have
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know more than
children
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their children
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because of their life
experience
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experiences
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.
However
,
children
lack
of
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experience than
adult
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adults
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who can indicate their
children
to make a better choice.
For instance
,
children
would spend their time on entertaining activities and escape
the
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academic learning. In
this
case,
parents
could provide advice which only
focus
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on how to manage
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their
thier
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their
learning and leisure time
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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