Boxing is a bloody sport that often results in physical injuries. It is inappropriate for this sport to exist in the modern age. Do you agree or disagree?

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Advertisements are very popular nowadays and they influence everyone who is exposed to them in
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direct or indirect manner. The problem is that young
kids
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are influenced as well. The question to ask is should
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commercial
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be allowed or not. There are different opinions, though I believe that it can be allowed. Some
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claim that
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are very vulnerable,
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is why any kind of information could become dangerous for them. These
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believe that watching
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TV might make our
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do what others ask them to do.
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insufficient critical thinking
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can not filter reliable information.
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of
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age may ask parents to buy them a very expensive soldier toy after watching a commercial. Military toys influence
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thinking in a way that makes them violent. The consequences of
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can not be predicted.
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, some
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believe that, even though
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children
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are vulnerable and fragile, it is impossible to protect them from all kinds of dangers. As a matter of fact, it is necessary to educate
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from
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very young age and to discuss with them everything they face every day. It is parents’ responsibility to tell their
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what is good and what is bad.
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, it is evident that the government should not leave
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field uncontrolled.
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reason,
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section of advertisement should be controlled by special policies and rules but the commercials must not be forbidden.
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is what I personally believe. To sum everything up, it is necessary to say that
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a provocative topic can be discussed for a long period of time. Some
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believe that we should protect our
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and let them do what we think is beneficial for them. Others believe that we have to advocate
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kids
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by increasing the educational rate and
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awareness of possible dangers that an advertisement might provide. The second position is what I step up to.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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