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The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000

The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000
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The bar charts compare the percentage of total travellers using several
modes
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 of
transport
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,
such
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 as bus,
car
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, bike, and by foot in European City between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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, in 1960 was dominated by going out on foot,
,
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meanwhile in ,2000 people were in a comfort to using
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car
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the car
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 as they went out. In terms of going outside by
car
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,
,
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obviously
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 there was a risen exponentially in the total percentage of travellers between 1960 and 200. In 1960, only 5% of people used
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car
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a car
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 as a
transport
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, and
this
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 progressively inclined, reaching a record of about 35% in 2000. Went out using the bus,
on the other hand
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, getting the highest peminat in 1960 which was about 25%, but nor favourable or less taken
modes
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 of
transport
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 in 1960 and 2000, around a little below 20% and just above 15% respectively. Other
modes
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 of
transport
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 decrease significantly throughout the time. Even though walking out on foot was the community's favourable back
then
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 in 1960 about a little under 35%, it faced a downward trend in 2000 by only just beneath 10%. The situation was
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similarly
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 in using bikes as a
transport
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 to go out in 1960 which was about 25% to roughly went down as less taken
modes
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 of
transport
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 in 2000 by only 5%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words modes, transport, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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