The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000

The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000
The bar charts compare the percentage of total travellers using several
modes
of
transport
,
such
as bus,
car
, bike, and by foot in European City between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
, in 1960 was dominated by going out on foot,
,
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meanwhile in ,2000 people were in a comfort to using
car
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the car
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as they went out. In terms of going outside by
car
,
,
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obviously
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there was a risen exponentially in the total percentage of travellers between 1960 and 200. In 1960, only 5% of people used
car
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as a
transport
, and
this
progressively inclined, reaching a record of about 35% in 2000. Went out using the bus,
on the other hand
, getting the highest peminat in 1960 which was about 25%, but nor favourable or less taken
modes
of
transport
in 1960 and 2000, around a little below 20% and just above 15% respectively. Other
modes
of
transport
decrease significantly throughout the time. Even though walking out on foot was the community's favourable back
then
in 1960 about a little under 35%, it faced a downward trend in 2000 by only just beneath 10%. The situation was
similarly
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in using bikes as a
transport
to go out in 1960 which was about 25% to roughly went down as less taken
modes
of
transport
in 2000 by only 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words modes, transport, car with synonyms.
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