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The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017
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The line graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
island
 over 7 years from 2010 to 2017. The
amount
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 of visitors totalled
millions
.
Overall
, the total
amount
 of
people
 who decided to stay on cruise ships and stayed on
island
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the island
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 significantly rise over the years. With regard to the total of
people
 who spend nights on cruise ships, it began at just above 0 which is around 0.25
millions
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 in 2010 of tourist and began to slightly increase by 0.5 in 2011 and fall back again like at the start point in 2012. On the other ,hand the
people
 who decided to stay on the
island
 in 2010 are about just below 1
millions
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people
 and remained the same over 1 year, but began to show an increase to about reached 1.5
millions
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million
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. between 2012 to 2015, the total
amount
 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
Island
 faced an upward trend, reaching above 2.5
millions
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million
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 and it remain the same
amount
 in 2016
ofbecause
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because
the
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 decrease in visitors staying on the
island
. In 2017 it reached the peaked
amount
 of
people
 visiting the Caribbean
Island
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Islands
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about 3.5
millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, island, millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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