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The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Carribean island between 2010 and 2017
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The line graph illustrates the
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amount
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number
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
island
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 over 7 years from 2010 to 2017. The
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amount
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number
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 of visitors totalled
millions
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.
Overall
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, the total
amount
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 of
people
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 who decided to stay on cruise ships and stayed on
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island
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the island
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 significantly rise over the years. With regard to the total of
people
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 who spend nights on cruise ships, it began at just above 0 which is around 0.25
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millions
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 in 2010 of tourist and began to slightly increase by 0.5 in 2011 and fall back again like at the start point in 2012. On the other ,hand the
people
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 who decided to stay on the
island
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 in 2010 are about just below 1
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millions
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people
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 and remained the same over 1 year, but began to show an increase to about reached 1.5
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millions
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million
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. between 2012 to 2015, the total
amount
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
Island
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 faced an upward trend, reaching above 2.5
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millions
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million
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 and it remain the same
amount
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 in 2016
ofbecause
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because
the
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of the
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 decrease in visitors staying on the
island
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. In 2017 it reached the peaked
amount
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 of
people
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 visiting the Caribbean
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Island
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Islands
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about 3.5
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millions
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million
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, island, millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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