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the chart showed the information about the various professtions in the UK and their salaries. The table show the average working hours per week for each professions

the chart showed the information about the various professtions in the UK and their salaries. The table show the average working hours per week for each professions
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The bar chart and table given offer insights into the amount of salary on starting and after three years of working, and the number of average working
hours
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 every week for people from 5 different occupations, based on the data collected in the United Kingdom. From an
overall
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 perspective, the most striking feature is underground drivers held the lion’s share,
while
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 the opposite is true for nurses. Meanwhile, an upward trend in the salary after three-year working was witnessed in most jobs, which is not in tandem with the police. It is
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 evident that there was a remarkable disparity among the surveyed jobs. Regarding information pertaining to the bar chart, the underground drivers ranked at the top-tier position, with 50,000
Euro
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 and 51,000
Euro
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 after three years, followed by firefighters and teachers. The increase of the former was by 2,000
Euro
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, which was the starting point at a shade of 40,000
Euro
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. The figure for the latter grew from 31,000
Euro
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 to 35,000
Euro
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. Interestingly, the convergence of the police’s income between on
starting
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 and after three years appeared to be minimal. Enlisting the final position was nurses with the leap from 16,000
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Euro
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 to 19,000
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Euro
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. As far as the figures in the table are concerned, teachers and firefighters held the predominant proportion at 55
hours
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 in weekly average working time. The figure is followed by police and nurses, which is responsible for 40
hours
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 and 38
hours
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. The minuscule share was devoted to underground drivers with 36
hours
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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