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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social prblems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statements?

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When in Rome, do as the Romans do.
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, when visiting a foreign country with a different
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, not knowing it can lead to serious social and practical challenges. I completely agree with
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 statement for two main reasons, which I will explain below. First and foremost, human beings are social creatures, and just as we need food and water, we
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 need the company of family, friends, and
neighbors
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. Effective communication is crucial to forming connections, and
language
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 is the primary medium through which we share thoughts and feelings. To integrate with locals, speaking their
language
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 is essential, as without it, one may face serious social difficulties.
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, if you are in France and do not speak French, you will likely struggle to engage with locals, make friends, or socialize. Not understanding others’ conversations can lead to feelings of exclusion and loneliness. Learning and speaking French, in
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 case, can help avoid isolation and foster a sense of belonging.
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, there are various practical challenges associated with not knowing the local
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, including difficulties in shopping, dining out, or seeking medical assistance in emergencies. Without the local
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, even simple tasks
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 as asking for directions or using public transportation can become overwhelming.
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, when I visited China
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 year, I found it challenging to navigate since most people did not speak English, and I was unfamiliar with Chinese. Simple tasks like asking for directions became a nightmare. I eventually learned some basic Chinese, which made my experience much easier.
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 reason, I support the idea of learning at least some basics of a foreign
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, even if one only plans to stay short-term. In conclusion,
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 English is widely spoken globally, some countries prioritize their local languages. If we plan to visit
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 places, it is in our best interest to learn the local
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 to make life easier for ourselves and to show respect for the local culture.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas.
Task Achievement
While addressing the challenges of not speaking a foreign language is well-covered, consider also discussing any potential positives as a counterbalance to strengthen the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a well-defined introduction and conclusion, clearly stating the writer's standpoint.
Task Achievement
The examples provided, such as personal experience in China, effectively illustrate the practical challenges of language barriers.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are presented in a logical and organized manner, aiding clarity and understanding.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • miscommunications
  • social isolation
  • underemployment
  • language barrier
  • cultural misunderstandings
  • practical issues
  • everyday situations
  • fluency
  • parent-teacher meetings
  • accessing services
  • cultural faux pas
  • frustrations
  • legal aid
  • serious repercussions
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