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In the future, it may be scientifically possible for people to live for 150 years. This could be good news for individuals but it may have negative consequences for our world as a whole. What are the benefits and risks of people living to 150?

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In the years to come, humans can prolong life expectancy to even 150. The main benefit of
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 each person can have abundant time to enjoy their life with their family. Meanwhile, in the bigger picture, we couldn't deny the fact that many elderly will put an economic strain on society. A long life span is indeed bliss for every individual since we may get a plethora of time to take care of our near and dear ones.
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, a 150-year-old can raise at least 5 generations of offspring, which is just a dream of everyone. His children
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 have him as an emotional pillar and a knowledgeable guide, who will always be there to give them some valuable advice when they are in a rut. And in return, he
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 receives more happiness and cares from family members. Having that said, more people living beyond a hundred years is not always a positive signal for the economy. As a majority of senior citizens lose their ability to function and make money, they don't have any significant contribution to the development of a country. Take Italy as an example, currently,
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 country is witnessing an imbalance in the population distribution, with an alarmingly high proportion of aged people, which causes the country hardly ever maintain an adequate labour force in the long term. In conclusion, individually, it would be great for everyone to have many years to stay in
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 world because they are able to live with their offspring for as long as they want, a society with a large part of the retired population will struggle to retain the financial stability though.
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