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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, many fathers stay at home and
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, many mothers go out to work.
This
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 could be related to the distribution of tasks in modern families. Formerly,
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 was not like
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 and it was the man who always went to work. I think that it is a positive development. Referring to the organization of the schedule, many marriages prefer to distribute the tasks of the house, in
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 way, they gain either more time or more money. More time can be saved,
for example
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, if the father,
while
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 he is at home, takes care of showering or giving dinner to the children and can put them to bed earlier to have more time with his wife after work.
On the other hand
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, it can be done to earn more money, making the person who earns more money of the two go to a job and the other stay at home and in
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 way avoid paying a salary to a person to do household chores. It is a great way to save wealth. I think
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 is a very positive thing because apart from the benefits that I have already mentioned,
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 can help life as a couple since it improves communication between the two components of the marriage. In fact,
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 a study by the University of Oklahoma, 80% of couples that invert their roles,
last
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 at least 15 more years. It
also
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 breaks the repetition of days and the typical routines of conventional marriages, which makes each day get out of the routine.
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,
this
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 can
also
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 help children have a closer relationship with their father, which a few years ago was more difficult.
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, these non-conventional roles have many advantages
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 as saving wealth, gaining a lifetime and improving the relationship with your partner and children.

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The essay directly addresses the question by discussing both reasons for the shift and its positive implications.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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