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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there are many trends that become popular all around the world. So that,
people
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 are able to get the same
products
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 and,
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, become more and more similar to each other.
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 others argue so, I believe that there are some positive effects of it. On the one hand, similarity among
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 can cause
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problems with self-confidence and some mental disorders.
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, in some developed countries there were
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cases when a teenager committed
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suicide because of the same cloth
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 another teen.
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, if there are the same
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 anywhere in the world, they will be no uniqueness
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 the country, or even nation.
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, there will be no attractiveness and interest
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 the country, if tourists can not buy any unique product there.
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, there are some positive effects of
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 as big economic incomes for companies that sell
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.
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, big popularity got clothes from Zara, which is widely advertised by every second blogger.
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people
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 are all covered by fashionable shirts and Zara company has good advantages from it.
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, buying similar
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 means that
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 quality already checked by someone and now is ready to exploit.
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, if one day a blogger tries some make-up
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 and proves that it is qualified,
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 day
people
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 all around the world try it. In conclusion, I consider that there are some positive consequences of countries getting more and more similar,
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 as economic advantages for companies selling
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 and quality
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proves
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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