The most impotant decision that young people have to follow is what career to choose.

People
have different opinions that the most significant
besides
is
have
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to prefer what
career
to choose, I completely agree with
this
new point and I believe that
to choose
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to create a
career
convenient e and frequent way to find money and living in is the most relaxing life without any difficulties.
This
essay will argue that
people
who prefer to build their own careers.
On the other hand
whether or not to create a
career
is becoming increasing among youngsters and it's true that many
people
choosing to work in a special job. Because
working
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career
is the cause of development and
provide
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with
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financial opportunities. Children and adults who enjoy convenient life following a
career
. And
also
it's is a significant way to achieve a high degree in their job. Choosing to work
career
gives you many advantages to build your life and over the lives.
For example
, can not suffer from financial issues.
On the other hand
, in developing countries. the number of
people
go
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abroad because of their job it's
also
best One way work in
Career
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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