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The chart above shows the number of people visiting museums in London in the 5 months in 2021.

The chart above shows the number of people visiting museums in London in the 5 months in 2021.
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The chart above shows the
number
 of
people
 visiting
museums
 in London in the 5 months
in
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 2021.
Overall
, we can see at all 4
museums
, there were different fluctuations, the
number
 of
people
 increased from few to high and
then
 gradually decreased. At the history
museum
 in June, it welcomes more than 400,000
visitors
, until July, it drops to 400,000
visitors
,
then
 skyrockets to 600,000 the next month,
then
 tends to decrease gradually to
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October
, which is just over 200,000
people
. As for the British
museum
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Museum
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 in June, it welcomes more than 400,000
people
,
then
 rapidly increases in August to more than 700,000
people
 and is the
museum
 that receives the most
visitors
 in
museums
,
then
 gradually decreases to
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October
, only about 450,000
people
. At the National
museum
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Museum
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, it is always in the state of the lowest
number
 of
visitors
 in the remaining
museums
 in June,
only
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with only
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 about 210000
people
 and the decrease in the following month and
then
 August is the highest with about 310,000
visitors
 and the lowest decrease
at
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in
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Octorber
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October
 with just under 20000
people
 visit.Science always maintains a high average
number
 of
visitors
 in the range of 400000 and the highest is 50000
people
 in September and the lowest is 300000 in October.
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