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The table above shows that the United States, European countries and other countries gave grants between 2006 and 2010 to developing countries.

The table above shows that the United States, European countries and other countries gave grants between 2006 and 2010 to developing countries.
The table above shows that the United States, European
countries
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 and other
countries
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 gave grants between 2006 and 2010 to developing
countries
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.
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, the total contribution of the world has increased except in 2009 and the United States is the largest contributor in
three
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countries
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while
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 Europe and other
countries
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 contribute the same amount to developing
countries
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. The United States funded $9.8
million
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 for developing
countries
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three
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 times as much as the EU and other
countries
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 compared with $3.1 and $2.8
million
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, respectively. The total finance for developing
countries
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 increased significantly from the
three
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 regions to $24.4
million
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 in 2006 to $0.9
million
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 in 2008. $28.1
million
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 was money that all
three
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 regions donated to developing regions by the end of the period. Among the U.S.
countries
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 still contributing the most was $20.3
million
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, much larger than the total of the European and other
countries
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 ($4.1 in Europe and $3.7 in other
countries
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).

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