The bar chart shows how many tourists visit four different museums in London over a five month period from June to October.

The bar chart shows how many tourists visit four different museums in London over a five month period from June to October.
The bar chart shows how many tourists visit four different museums in London over a
five
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five-month
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month
period from June to October. In general, all museums witness natural fluctuations in the
number
of
visitors
.
Moreover
, the
British
Museum
seems to be the most popular tourist destination. For the first two months of
this
period, all the data remained virtually unchanged with the
number
of people visiting the
British
Museum
of History, the
British
Museum
and the
Museum
of Science standing above 400.00
while
the figures for the National
Museum
are significantly lower, around 200,000. By August the
British
Museum
had attracted the highest
number
of
visitors
, with around 710,000, followed by the
number
for the Historical
Museum
accurately 600,000 people.
While
museum
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Museum
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of Science figures remained the same in July and August, the National
Museum
observed a significant growth to 300,000 in August.
Visitors
to
British
and historical museums declined from
month
to
month
while
science
Museum
figures rose slightly to 500,000 in September before falling to 300,000 in the
last
month
.
Finally
, the
number
of
visitors
of
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the National
Museum
was relatively static at about 20,000 in the remaining months.
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