The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
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The diagram illustrates the lifecycle of
Salmon
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, beginning from egg to matured
fish
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.
To begin
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with, the cycle begins in the river whereby one male and one female
Salmon
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mate and the female produces lots of small eggs in the creek which is known as an incubation period after that
fish
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larvae emerge.
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, after the emergence phase, they develop into tiny
fish
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and move to the areas of freshwater where they stay temporarily before moving to the estuary which is the intersection between river and ocean and
then
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shift to rearing areas which are in the ocean. The growth and maturation of
Salmon
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occur in the ocean. Once
fish
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reach adulthood they move to the stream which is the spawning place. In conclusion, the life cycle of
Salmon
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is depicted in different stages
that
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which
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are spawning, incubation, emergence, freshwater rearing, estuary rearing and migration to rearing areas which is quite fascinating.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Salmon
  • Spawn
  • Egg
  • Alevin
  • Fry
  • Parr
  • Smolt
  • Freshwater
  • Saltwater
  • Adaptation
  • Physiological changes
  • Habitat
  • Predators
  • Survival
  • Ecosystem
  • Migratory patterns
  • Reproductive cycle
  • Environmental factors
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