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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Regular life for
people
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 in highly populated urban areas can be challenging, creating
problems
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 they need to face. One solution is to stimulate
people
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 to move to smaller towns.
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, in my opinion,
problems
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such
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 as contamination and overpopulation should be addressed directly by
governments
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, as the relocation of citizens would not solve them.
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, there is always an issue of pollution caused by carbon emissions from cars and industrial areas within a city.
This
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 problem leads to various diseases and shorter lifespans for citizens. Clearly, living in the countryside or smaller towns is often less harmful to them, as there are fewer sources of contamination.
Secondly
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, large metropolitan
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 often suffer from overpopulation.
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, they were not built to accommodate the number of
people
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 currently populating them.
This
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 can lead to a wide range of
problems
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, from terrible traffic during rush hours to a disbalance between job opportunities and the number of candidates applying for them. One proposed solution for these
problems
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 is to encourage
people
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 to move to regional towns.
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, in my opinion,
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 is not always possible. Certainly,
governments
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 can make life in smaller
cities
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 more suitable for
people
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 by attracting businesses to open branches there and providing more job opportunities. Authorities should
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 invest in infrastructure to make their
cities
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 comfortable for everyone, regardless of
people
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’s jobs, ages, or other characteristics.
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, for some, it will never be sufficient as they prefer the lifestyle only a big city can provide. In
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 cases,
governments
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 should try their best to minimize the effects of the
problems
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people
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 encounter in large urban areas. In conclusion,
while
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 big
cities
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 introduce important issues
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 as pollution and overpopulation, I believe that
governments
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 should work with them directly rather than relying solely on encouraging
people
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 to leave.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban congestion
  • traffic jams
  • lengthy commutes
  • high cost of living
  • financial strain
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • green space
  • recreational areas
  • social isolation
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • public services strain
  • overpopulation
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