Nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in life. What do you think are the reasons of it? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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days, most
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people
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want to have babies later in their life, because
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many humans who want to build their own
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, they don’t need
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. Many people believe that they need money
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children. I can’t disagree with that. We all need some cash, for our needs. In order to have a
child
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prepare responsibly. On the one hand, children are the flowers of life,who will help their parents in the future and make life happy,
on the other hand
, there will be a lot of costs in order to raise a good person. In my opinion, if I wanted to have a
child
, at
first,
I would get on my feet, and
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my own business, to approach
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It will be possible to think about the birth of the
child
. Do not forget that not everybody has the opportunity to feed their family.
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, people who haven’t got
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where they can live in prosperity, money for
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medicines,
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job and others. If we repost to the public opinion,
then
every family is obliged to have at least one
child
due to
the decline in population growth. In conclusion, I would like to say that everyone has the right to
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whether to have
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until they reach their goal or live for themselves.
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  • prioritization
  • financial stability
  • educational prospects
  • personal development
  • health advancements
  • fertility options
  • economic uncertainties
  • parenthood
  • societal norms
  • life experience
  • generational gap
  • upbringing
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