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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 might argue that the total
money
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 that
one
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 makes should be kept totally
instead
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 of paying
taxes
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 to
governments
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. I,
however
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, believe that it is vital that
one
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 pay
taxes
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, and
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,
governments
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 should act better to curb tax evasion.
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, I totally disagree with
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 opinion.
One
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 obvious reason is that states raise
money
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 through
taxes
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, and they would surely encounter significant stumbling blocks if
people
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 did not pay
taxes
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, and so would
people
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. More precisely, since
one
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 of the most crucial sources of income for
governments
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 is the
money
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 they receive from
people
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, there is no doubt that if
people
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 cut down on paying
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money
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, states would face deficits in many areas, and since the quality of
people
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's lives is inextricably intertwined with
governments
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' conditions,
people
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 themselves might struggle with the consequent burdens. Another important reason is that some
people
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 are just scraping a living, and they do not have enough
money
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 for healthcare issues, and
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, they cannot afford to send their children to school. These
people
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 need the government's support to overcome these difficulties.
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,
governments
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 use
taxes
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 to support them, which is
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 beneficial to taxpayers because they would not encounter crime and burglary
as a result
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 of the aforementioned issues, or at least the crime rate would decrease. By way of example, lots of conducted surveys reveal that there is a direct relation between these difficulties and the crime level.
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, paying
taxes
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 is
also
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 advantageous to
people
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. In conclusion, even though some may assert that
people
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 ought to keep their
money
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 and it is needless to pay
taxes
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, I totally disagree with
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 assertion because it has its own merits to pay states our
taxes
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