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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 might argue that the total
money
 that
one
 makes should be kept totally
instead
 of paying
taxes
 to
governments
. I,
however
, believe that it is vital that
one
 pay
taxes
, and
moreover
,
governments
 should act better to curb tax evasion.
Therefore
, I totally disagree with
this
 opinion.
One
 obvious reason is that states raise
money
 through
taxes
, and they would surely encounter significant stumbling blocks if
people
 did not pay
taxes
, and so would
people
. More precisely, since
one
 of the most crucial sources of income for
governments
 is the
money
 they receive from
people
, there is no doubt that if
people
 cut down on paying
this
money
, states would face deficits in many areas, and since the quality of
people
's lives is inextricably intertwined with
governments
' conditions,
people
 themselves might struggle with the consequent burdens. Another important reason is that some
people
 are just scraping a living, and they do not have enough
money
 for healthcare issues, and
furthermore
, they cannot afford to send their children to school. These
people
 need the government's support to overcome these difficulties.
Consequently
,
governments
 use
taxes
 to support them, which is
also
 beneficial to taxpayers because they would not encounter crime and burglary
as a result
 of the aforementioned issues, or at least the crime rate would decrease. By way of example, lots of conducted surveys reveal that there is a direct relation between these difficulties and the crime level.
Thus
, paying
taxes
 is
also
 advantageous to
people
. In conclusion, even though some may assert that
people
 ought to keep their
money
 and it is needless to pay
taxes
, I totally disagree with
this
 assertion because it has its own merits to pay states our
taxes
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