crime and punishment, how to stop criminals re-offending. Give your views and opinion.
Criminality has become one of the major issues in some countries. Every year,
rate
of crime Correct article usage
the rate
is
increases and has more variety. Many criminals are already Unnecessary verb
apply
went
to Wrong verb form
gone
the
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apply
prison
but keep coming back to do same
bad actions or even worse than before. Correct article usage
the same
This
essay will explain why bad people keep doing that and the solutions to address this
issue.
To begin
with, the laws is
too simple for some people. For Correct subject-verb agreement
are
examples
, the corruptors stole much Fix the agreement mistake
example
money
from society but they only got punished for 2 until 5 years in jail with comfortable rooms. They already knew once they exit the
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apply
prison
they can corrupt another
Correct quantifier usage
other
money
with greater
amount and still get Correct article usage
a greater
light
penalty. It is not fair compare to Add an article
a light
the light
Add an article
the condition
a condition
condition
that happened Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
due to
their crime. Authorities should reconsider punishment for corruptors because they harm country
and society. The corruptors should get more Correct article usage
the country
sentence
or at least mix their rooms with Fix the agreement mistake
sentences
another criminals
, Replace the adjective
another criminal
other criminals
no
Change preposition
with no
privilige
in the Correct your spelling
privilege
prison
.
Additionally
, many guards receive some money
from Add an article
the prisoner
a prisoner
prisoner
, so Fix the agreement mistake
prisoners
Add an article
the inmate
inmate
could get special Fix the agreement mistake
inmates
treatments
in gaol. Fix the agreement mistake
treatment
For instance
, they can get some cigarretes
in jail because they have some Correct your spelling
cigarettes
money
. It made them think there is no differences
to live inside and outside of Fix the agreement mistake
difference
prison
. To handle this
proble
, the government should do sudden investigations more often, without announcement to Correct your spelling
problem
head
of Add an article
the head
prison
, and imposes sanctions Add an article
the prison
to
the officers who Change preposition
on
against
the rules.
In conclusion, easy punishments make some criminals re-offending their Add a missing verb
are against
crime
. The responsible bureaucrats should re-arrange the laws to deter them.Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
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