Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Abolition of
taxes
is offered by some
people
. They think
people
should keep the
money
for themselves
instead
of giving it to the state as a tax. To sum extent it might have some valid reasons from an ethical view.
On the contrary
, if
taxes
were not paid , it would have detrimental effects on
people
who have low-income levels.
To begin
with, the most detrimental effect of the above notion is the potential for food shortage which would affect poor
people
. The government has some duties to their citizens. They must protect their citizens from downsides. Poverty is one of these downsides. If the government does not help
people
who need it , they might be forced to be criminals.
For example
, in some countries which is undeveloped or which has drastic unemployment
problem
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there are much more crime committed than others. In light of
this
example, it can be seen easily , there is a direct correlation between crime rates and welfare levels. Despite the fact that
taxes
protect our social balance, there are some ethical questions about paying
taxes
.
To begin
with,
taxes
are collected without getting permission from the owners so it is not acceptable morally.
Secondly
, there are claims about the politicians. Someone says that
politicians
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willing to spend
money
on
people
close to them.
Also
in some
countries
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corruption rates are predominant on the list of news and corruption is about
taxes
so
people
do not trust politicians. In conclusion, some
people
claim that paying
taxes
is not necessary
people
should save
money
. They meant that the right to spend
money
should not be given to the government,
people
can spend their own earnings. I can not say I agree with that opinion,
this
is partly
due to
social help. But no one can deny its ethical side. Despite its
morally
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drawbacks , if
taxes
' positive and negative sides were calculated, the positive ones might be heavier than the negatives.
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