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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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It must be accepted that nowadays, there has been a significant increase in the usage of
plastic
 bags, bottles and packaging worldwide. It impacts negatively the environment. There are many reasons we should avoid
such
plastic
products
.
Therefore
, few initiatives must be taken by governments and individuals to solve
this
 problem to a large extent.
Plastic
 is playing a vital role in global warming. There are several reasons to damage the environment.
Firstly
,
such
plastic
products
 are made from chemicals like oil, gas and fuels and emits hazardous Carbon dioxide and Carbon monoxide
while
 burning which leads to Air pollution. The second aspect is the improper wastage of thin plastics which stick everywhere to harmful to humans
as well as
 animals. To illustrate, The Article published by the Economic Times that many animals were killed by consuming
plastic
 bags from dumping zones.
Lastly
, The
plastic
 manufacturing process is very crucial and could impact worker health.
However
, a few measures can be taken to avoid
such
 fearful situations. The most important is that the Government should ban
such
 kinds of
products
 and suspend the license of the suppliers
as well as
 manufacturers.
Moreover
, all
plastic
 bottles and tins are to be manufactured in
such
 a way as to ease of recycling process and they must be labelled.
In addition
 to that, all individuals should take the initiative to recycle those by submitting them to the recycling machine and the government
also
 encourages everyone to follow
this
 process.
Finally
, People should refer to paper or fabric-made handbags to carry stuff which is eco-friendly. To put it in a nutshell, strict actions should be implemented by the government to avoid
plastic
products
 rather than encourage people to use eco-friendly
products
 and self-awareness is another key to protecting the environment and animals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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