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The bar chart below shows Schotland's exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014

The bar chart below shows Schotland's exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014
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The graph
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 the number of
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the
Scotland’s
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 exports to the
UK
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 and other areas in 2014.
Accroding
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According
 to the data,
Scotland’s
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 exits of the industry to the two regions had great differences in 2014. Among them,
import’s
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imports
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 of Business Services and Finance, Hotels and Restaurant Services in
the all
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place were the largest together, up to 15.5
billion
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 and the number
of
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 Agriculture, Forestry, Fishing and Mining were the smallest, down to only 3
billion
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. It can be noticed that the digit of
Scotland’s
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 exits for the rest of the world on Business Services amounted to a peak, had 13.8
billion
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,
whereas
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the
UK
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’s exports only had 1.7
billion
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.
On the contrary
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,
Scotland’s
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 forestry and fishing output to the
UK
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 reached the bottom.
In particular
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, the figure
of
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for
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Scotland’s
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 Electrical, Instrument and Engineering
export’s
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exports
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 for
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UK
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the UK
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 and
world
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the world
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 were
distinguish
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distinguished
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 from other
industry
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industries
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, the
UK
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 imports
biger
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 than else parts of the earth
,
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 had 4 million, but else states
only
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were only
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 2.3 million.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words scotland’s, uk, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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