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The given bar chart presents how many million people used various types of public transport in Milan from 2010 to 2014.

The given bar chart presents how many million people used various types of public transport in Milan from 2010 to 2014.
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The given bar chart presents how many
million
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 people used various types of public transport in Milan from 2010 to 2014. In general, the highest usage of transportation in Milan was the metro,
while
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 the least chosen transport type was taxis. Looking at the details, train
users
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 experienced a 0.2 increase over three
years
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 (2010-2012). In 2013 the
number
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 of train
users
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 was 2.3
million
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,
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however
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 the next
year
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 it rose to 3.6
million
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. The share of people who used buses
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period was 1.0 ,the next two
years
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 buses section experienced fluctuation.From 2012 to 2014 (1.8-2.4) the proportion of bus
users
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 increased by 0.3. Regarding trams
figures
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 it is interesting to note that for the first two ,
years
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 the
number
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 of tram
users
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 was more than bus
users
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,
however
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 for the next three
years
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 the
number
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 of passengers who travelled by bus outnumbered the ones who choose trams. In 2014 there was a 0.2
million
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 difference in favour of busses. Turning to the other details, passengers of taxis were growing up every
year
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 from (2010-2014) that were 0.6
in
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at
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 the beginning of the
year
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 and end up with 1.0
million
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users
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. Though, all these types of transportation faced growth, demand for the metro was the highest in the chart (3.0-5.0
million
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) in all the given
years
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 in the chart. The
number
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 of people hit 5.0
million
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 passengers in 2014 which was a record quantity for
this
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year
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 amount all the transports.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, users, years, number, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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