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Car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. Why is this the case? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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 can be separated makes traffic, Presently, old roads and modern vehicles
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. There are conflicting driver
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 the roads which cannot
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 together. If
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problem
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 may rises.
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 and cyclist shares the same portion of the road. In the following paragraphs, I will explain what are the consequences
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 and the corresponding problem. The combination of
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drivers
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 and cyclists can cause a humongous number of
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. It is because the actual
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 between
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 are not
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, the possibility of
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are
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 high.
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, so they go to the
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 are always high. To tackle the
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, their
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 can be separated and their
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 is
also
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 as important as the
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. Traffic
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 could be considered as the other consequence
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 the above statement. Because cyclists destroy discipline of the
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drivers
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car
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 cannot endure the activity of cyclists so they even
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 the discipline
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 overtaking each other.
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 smooth. there is so
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 and regulation for both
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.To address
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, some regulations and penalties must
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 in place for the counties that still have problems
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 for both
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 government plays a huge role to solve the
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 project for them to solve the
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, they can come up with
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 and new regulations within a few years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • share the same roads
  • cause problems
  • lack of understanding
  • limited infrastructure
  • reckless behavior
  • increased awareness
  • education
  • enforcing traffic laws
  • regulations
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