The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
The pie charts compare the data for five reasons why people chose to cycle and drive to
work
. The indications for each reason are provided in percent measurements
while
the diagrams provide no information on when and where the data was taken from.
Overall
, the major
part
of those who cycled to
work
did so in order to become healthy and fit. Another good
part
commuted by bike to cut the amount of air pollution in their local areas. When it comes to driving, the biggest
part
of the respondents admitted that they do so because of the comfort
cars
provide
while
reasonable
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number of people stated that the
long distance
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obliges them to drive to their workplaces. Health and fitness as a reason to cycle made up 30%. The same percentile of the respondents
pedaled
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to
work
for less pollution. The data for problems with parking accounted for 15%. The figures for those who chose a bike because they require no cost and are faster than
cars
accounted for 13% and 12% correspondingly. When
cars
are concerned, the biggest
part
– 40% of the respondents drove to
work
due to
them being comfortable. The distance to
work
urged 21% of the people to drive. A bit lower proportions belonged to those who needed to carry items with them to
work
and those who considered
cars
safer and faster than cycling.
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