The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
The pie charts compare the data for five reasons why people chose to cycle and drive to
work
. The indications for each reason are provided in percent measurements Use synonyms
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the diagrams provide no information on when and where the data was taken from.
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Overall
, the major Linking Words
part
of those who cycled to Use synonyms
work
did so in order to become healthy and fit. Another good Use synonyms
part
commuted by bike to cut the amount of air pollution in their local areas. When it comes to driving, the biggest Use synonyms
part
of the respondents admitted that they do so because of the comfort Use synonyms
cars
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reasonable
number of people stated that the Change the article
a reasonable
the reasonable
long distance
obliges them to drive to their workplaces.
Health and fitness as a reason to cycle made up 30%. The same percentile of the respondents Add a hyphen
long-distance
pedaled
to Change the spelling
pedalled
work
for less pollution. The data for problems with parking accounted for 15%. The figures for those who chose a bike because they require no cost and are faster than Use synonyms
cars
accounted for 13% and 12% correspondingly.
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cars
are concerned, the biggest Use synonyms
part
– 40% of the respondents drove to Use synonyms
work
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due to
them being comfortable. The distance to Linking Words
work
urged 21% of the people to drive. A bit lower proportions belonged to those who needed to carry items with them to Use synonyms
work
and those who considered Use synonyms
cars
safer and faster than cycling.Use synonyms
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