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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #country
In recent years,
increasingly
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 the number of
students
 who selected to
study
 their tertiary
education
 abroad. In my opinion, the advantages of studying higher
education
 in foreign
conutries
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countries
outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, there are
a
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various drawbacks
of
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 studying in
foreign
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 nation.
Firstly
, studying
aborad
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abroad
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 can be extremely expensive, which
this
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can make a lot of financial burden
in
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students
.
This
 is because some
students
study
 and work at the same time in order to meet the university and accommodation fees , which
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can be stressful mentally and financially
on
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 the
students
 who
study
 abroad.
Secondly
,
students
 who
study
 in foreign countries can face challenges especially, in the first months . To illustrate,
students
 can encounter culture shock , and
also
students
 can feel homesickness ,
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 these difficulties take time in order to adapt to a new environment.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue that the upsides of studying abroad
significantly
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 more than
downsides
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. The first benefit , studying in foreign countries allows people to
study
 in top universities in order to receive
better
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 quality
education
.
For example
, the most people ambition to
study
 in the Cambridge University to get better
education
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 outcomes
as well as
better
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 professional career in future.
Therefore
, when
students
 finish their
studied
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 they will work as, doctors, engineers, and lawyers, which
they
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can
provides
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best
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 services for people in
home
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 country. The second benefit, studying abroad can help to minimize the cultural difference between nations.
In other words
,
students
 will become open-mind to accept different
culture
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cultures
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 and traditions , which
this
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can contribute to spreading
the
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peace
in
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the
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worldwide. In conclusion, in my
perspective
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 the merits of studying in foreign nations outweigh the demerits
,
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 because
students
 can receive high quality
of
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education
 and
also
 they will become more open mind to accept other cultures.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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