Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions.
Advanced technologies and modern
lifestyle
could be factors making Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
people
inactive and weaker than before. To be healthy and strong, Use synonyms
people
must find opportunities to work out in their daily Use synonyms
living
.
Advanced technology particularly a variety of Replace the word
lives
the
applications in smartphones Correct article usage
apply
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
have more convenient and easier lifestyles which leads them to less physical movements. Use synonyms
This
could be the reason why Linking Words
people
are inactive. Use synonyms
For example
, before smartphones were approaching, officers had to go for lunch in a cafeteria or a restaurant outside of the office. So, they have a chance to walk and change their positions in order to get some food. At present, they can order food via the applications Linking Words
such
as Grab or Panda and so on which deliver directly to their office. Linking Words
Moreover
, it’s not only food that can be ordered online, but Linking Words
also
most of everything in supermarkets or malls Linking Words
could
be delivered everywhere. Wrong verb form
can
Therefore
, the consequences of these behaviour changes bring them to unhealthy lifestyles.
For Linking Words
people
who desire to get fit and powerful as they used to be, they have to try to adjust some of their daily Use synonyms
routine
. Change to a plural noun
routines
For instance
, reducing online shopping and going shopping with friends or family more often can be beneficial for both physical health and mental health. Linking Words
Additionally
, finding different ways to get more physical fitness in the workplace Linking Words
such
as taking the stairs Linking Words
instead
of the lift could bring some serious benefits for your health.
Linking Words
To sum up
, most Linking Words
people
are inactive and unenergetic because of the advanced technology which leads to Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
apply
change
Fix the agreement mistake
changes
of
several activities in daily life. To be active Change preposition
in
people
should consider adjusting their daily activities by using less technology.Use synonyms
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The conclusion succinctly summaries the main points, linking them back to the question effectively.
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