Due to a more sedentary lifestyle, children in developed nations have higher levels of obesity compared to previous generations. What problems does this cause and what are the possible solutions?

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Nowadays youngster's
lifestyle
is less active than it was in the past, especially in developed countries.
As a
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we can see increasing obesity
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and serious health issues in the future. In
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essay, I will describe the reasons
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this
situation and propose solutions .
To begin
with,
due to
technological advancement adolescent's
lifestyle
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changed significantly. If two or three decades before
children
spent most of their time outdoors, having different activities with their friends,
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the present situation changed.
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modern
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they don't need to leave their houses even for studying, because a lot of schools offer online classes.
Moreover
, they can find new friends, entertain themselves or find all information they need on
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. Undoubtedly, these changes make people's life easier and give them more opportunities,
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communication with individuals all over the world.
On the other hand
, some serious health problems,
such
as obesity,can appear. To resolve
this
issue both government and parents should take some measures.
Firstly
, the government can motivate
children
with some social advertisements on
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.
Secondly
, some activity groups for youngsters should be organised for free.
Furthermore
, parents have to explain
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children
all the consequences of a sedentary
lifestyle
and change their own
lifestyle
, because
children
like to imitate their parents. In conclusion, I think that modern technologies made our life easier and more interesting , but
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there are some disadvantages ,
such
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of activities. So, certain measures should be taken to avoid serious health disorders in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • obesity
  • developed nations
  • health conditions
  • diabetes
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • hypertension
  • psychological impact
  • self-esteem
  • depression
  • mental health issues
  • bullying
  • social isolation
  • academic performance
  • school absenteeism
  • healthcare systems
  • financial strain
  • medical treatments
  • interventions
  • physical activities
  • nutritional education
  • healthy eating habits
  • balanced diets
  • policy implementation
  • junk food advertising
  • nutritious food options
  • screen time
  • parental involvement
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