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Some say it is better to have vertical cities with lots of tall buildings rather than horizontal cities with fewer tall buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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City
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 infrastructure has become the main concern for all metropolitan cities in the world. Many people argue that cities are better with more high-rise
buildings
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 rather than low-rise
buildings
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. In my opinion, I strongly disagree as I believe a
city
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 covered by many tall
buildings
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 will face more complex problems in the environment and society. For the environmental
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, the construction of high-rise
buildings
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 is more complex, so it takes more space below the ground to support the construction. The higher the building, the more it consumes the ground space below.
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 will
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 the soil water storage for the long term, which
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 will lead to the reduction of the soil level. Once the building is constructed, it will be difficult to demolish or even renovate it. The second reason is that the tall building will be able to occupy more people which could lead to a dense population in the
city
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. There are already many examples of how the dense population will
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 the social gap and conflict within the
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.
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 in New York, as the
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 attracts a lot of workers to move in with its infinity of job opportunities, it
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 has a high number of criminals. The vertical and horizontal friction among its people is caused by the density of the
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. In conclusion, having more high-rise
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 in the
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 will only lead to harm rather than a good
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. As a long-term effect, it will destroy the land and
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 create a huge social gap among its citizen.
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