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Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy life.

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There is an argument about whether
children
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 should be given or not. Some people contend that
children
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, regardless of their ages, should be given
responsibilities
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 as helping at home or at work,
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 others argue that they need to enjoy their lives without any obligations except for in school. I advocate the view that the former thought is more accurate. In terms of the latter perspective, it is undeniable that education is crucially important for the future of any child and after school will they should be given
time
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 to play their favourite games or hanging out with their mates because it is proven that doing entertaining pastimes is a momentous part of the process of their upbringing.
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, I think childhood is a period that all
children
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 should dedicate most of their spare
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 out of school to recreational activities, namely solo sports, group sports, and spending
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 with their peers.
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, I firmly believe that there are numerous life
skills
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 which
children
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 should learn
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 as decision-making
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,
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 management
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, and critical thinking
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.
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, if parents give them
responsibilities
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 as either making them in charge of doing some household chores or making them familiar with different workplaces and even making them do a job
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 aligned with their personality can lead to instilling
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 truth that in real life they have various forms of obligations and their lessons shouldn't be an excuse to shirk their
responsibilities
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 toward doing them.
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, I think if they do different jobs they may not only become familiar with their strengths
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 but
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 can opt for their carrier with more information in the distant future. In conclusion, I strongly believe
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 entertainment exerts a big influence on
children
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's lives they should have extra
responsibilities
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 to become more successful in both their personal lives and career in the future.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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