The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The graph is about the closure of existing
shops
and the opening of new ones in a particular country over 7
years
from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, in 2011 approximately many new
stores
were inaugurated as compared to the closures of old ones.
Whereas
, in the year 2018 we can see that the number of new shop openings has drastically plummeted but a minimum fall is seen in the closure of
shops
over the period of time. In 2011 approximately 8500 new
shops
were opened which is no doubt the highest count of all time
whereas
6500 existing
shops
were closed. In the year ,2012 the count of openings significantly changed from 8500 to 4000. In 2014 the values of opening and closing
stores
were approximately the same. Moving on, in the year 2015 approximately 500 were closed which is so far the least among all the
years
. The count of new
stores
being opened is steady which is approximately 4000. It is seen that in the
years
2016 and 2018 the same number of
stores
were closed. Over the period of 7 ,
years
there is seen that opening of new
shops
has been decreased.
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  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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