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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The graph is about the closure of existing
shops
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 and the opening of new ones in a particular country over 7
years
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 from 2011 to 2018.
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, in 2011 approximately many new
stores
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 were inaugurated as compared to the closures of old ones.
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, in the year 2018 we can see that the number of new shop openings has drastically plummeted but a minimum fall is seen in the closure of
shops
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 over the period of time. In 2011 approximately 8500 new
shops
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 were opened which is no doubt the highest count of all time
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 6500 existing
shops
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 were closed. In the year ,2012 the count of openings significantly changed from 8500 to 4000. In 2014 the values of opening and closing
stores
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 were approximately the same. Moving on, in the year 2015 approximately 500 were closed which is so far the least among all the
years
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. The count of new
stores
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 being opened is steady which is approximately 4000. It is seen that in the
years
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 2016 and 2018 the same number of
stores
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 were closed. Over the period of 7 ,
years
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 there is seen that opening of new
shops
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 has been decreased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, years, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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