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Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

#minutes #friend #birthday #party #addresses #dear……………………
Dear Coco, I was so grateful, to see you at my birthday party. Thank you for taking out your precious time from your busy schedule, for me.
Moreover
, thank you so much for the gift, even though, that was not necessary, your presence was enough, to make my day.
Further
, the tablet you gave me, is very useful. As you know my exams are close. So, I am doing my writing practice on it.
Furthermore
, in my free time, I watch inspirational videos and documentaries.
Also
, in the morning, my mother loves to listen to her religious music. Coco, on my birthday, we did not get enough time to talk so, I am planning to visit your city next weekend to thank you personally for attending my greatest day and for the wonderful gift. We will go for a short trip where we can do
such
 activities- swimming, climbing trekking etc.
Also
, I booked one of the best restaurants for breakfast and dinner. In the meantime, we can enjoy street food and explore tourist spots in your city. Your buddy Kitty.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your ideas clearly into separate paragraphs. Try separating the letter into introduction, main content, and conclusion for better clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for a more structured approach.
Task Achievement
You've clearly thanked your friend and explained the usefulness of the gift, covering all parts of the task effectively.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for the context, maintaining a conversational style throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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