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Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give your opinion.

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Food is a fundamental need for surviving in
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 world. It is argued, by many individuals that shops should sell domestic items
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 of international ones. I believe that the above notion is correct because it makes our economy strong and is readily available at a cheap price as well. I will
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 elaborate on these points in
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 essay below.
It is clear that
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 selling our own things helps us boost our financial status and
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 increased the lifestyle of many public like farmers, folk working in factories, and many more who gave their best to make these products.
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, it's our duty to promote the local product in the market
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 running towards the product made in other countries.
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, noodles are sold at a high rate everywhere in the country
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 our homeland
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 manufactures
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 products community give preference to the ones who come from Korea which is not good they must give attention to their product which is made in their country.
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,
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 local products are affordable
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 they are readily present everywhere in the country because these are our basic development.
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, imported factors are expensive it is hard for ordinary people to buy that objects.
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, Government needs more money to tackle
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 problem of economic issues so it's the duty of our high ministry to promote our own brands
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 of foreign brands. In conclusion, both local and imported food have their own pros and cons but I think that local food items are safer and stingy compared to imported ones. So, it is better for our growth to sell things made in our own nations by our people and companies.
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