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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Being fluent in
English
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 has become a major key to success in our modern day and age which enables people to connect, travel and work together.
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 learning
English
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 is essential, preserving indigenous
languages
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 is important to keep people connected to their own culture and backgrounds. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both points and give my opinion. In many countries,
English
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 is the second official language and it is a mandatory subject in schools and universities' curriculums. Fluency in
English
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 can facilitate better studying and work opportunities.
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, In Saudi Arabia, the Ministry of Education provides scholarships for talented citizens in the most prestigious universities in the US and the UK and one of the requirements is to be fluent in
English
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.
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, most companies nowadays have international offices all over the world and international employees who speak different native
languages
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 and need to work together in an efficient and productive way.
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, learning
English
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 is a skill which can open various doors for individuals who aspire to become citizens of the world.
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,
although
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 learning
English
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 is essential for academic and professional success, preserving native
languages
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 is vital. Local language reflects the local culture and history of its own people which should be passed on from one generation to another to maintain a unique identity.
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, In Catalonia, Spain the local government has reinforced the importance of learning and using the Catalan language in daily life by using it in governmental offices, schools, shops and the news.
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, In Saudi Arabia, children in the first and second grades take intensive classes in Arabic before starting to study
English
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 in the third grade. In conclusion,
while
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 learning
English
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 is important to become a citizen of the world and ensure opportunities for advanced studies and working internationally, local
languages
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 should be protected and collaborative efforts should be implemented by local governments and citizens to preserve them.

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coherence cohesion
While the essay is well-structured, make sure to consistently elaborate on each point to further enhance clarity and engagement.
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Ensure that each paragraph explicitly links back to the main topic to maintain a consistent thread throughout.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame your discussion, keeping the reader engaged.
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Excellent use of specific examples, such as Catalonia and Saudi Arabia, which support your arguments effectively.
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