the older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. however, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that many older
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think traditionally about living.
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, many
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argue that these methods can not be beneficial in our modern society. I
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with
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opinion because in some ways their
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experience can be a big flip to our
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. On
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hand,
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new generation
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unlimited access to everything that they are keen to know.
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, searching
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the Internet ,
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and reading
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specific
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extraordinary apps are a small part of
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big information tools which our grandparents could not have anymore. So, in our technological
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life
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young
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understand many things from social media, websites or their techno-geek friends.
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, the
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advice can not be as much useful as it was in the past for our parents.
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, doyens have seen more
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rather than children and
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test many things before we start to transform
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a small foetal. They have many ideas about the meaning of
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, how we should behave in front of different
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and so on. Meanwhile, they
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passionate about teaching young
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to how to perform
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in their
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but, each
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piece of advice
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can not be workout perfectly in nowadays
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is changing faster than a blink and
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today technology is taking
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place
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traditional resources and have
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point of view
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conventional beliefs. In conclusion, I
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do not completely disagree
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with
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idea but, not only aged
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have more experience but
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they have
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detailed view of
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modern generation can not be completely respectful in front of their families line.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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