The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
The table provides data about consumer expenditure on three different product categories in five countries in 2002.
Overall
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it is clear that
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the proportions of money spent on food,drinks, and smoking, were the highest in all five countries,
whereas
the expenditures on leisure and education were the lowest among all states. Starting with looking at
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category, which includes not only food and drinks
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but
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spendings on tobacco, the highest proportion of money, spent on these goods was in Turkey, at nearly 32%,
while
in Italy, it was almost two times lower, at around 16%.
According to
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and footwear
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, the statistics were approximately at the same level.
Although
, the highest percentage in
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perspective was in Italy with 9%
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spent on these goods.
Furthermore
, the proportions in both Ireland and Spain were almost similar, 6,43% and 6,51% respectively.
In addition
to
this
, figures spent on recreational activities and studying were the Lowest in Spain and Ireland, just under 2% and 2,21% respectively.
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  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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