Some people think that children should be involved in making school rules. While others believe that only adults can make school rules. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that school
rules
can be a debatable subject.
While
it is a commonly held belief that making school
rules
should involve
children
in it, there is
also
an argument that opposes it.
This
essay will analyse
this
topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand,
children
's involvement in rule-making can foster a sense of responsibility
children
's involvement in rule-making can foster a sense of responsibility.
In other words
, they will respect it more and it may lead to more realistic and relevant
rules
because they understand their own needs and challenges better.
In addition
,
Children
participating in creating
rules
can learn valuable life skills.
For example
,
such
as negotiation, critical thinking, and problem-solving.
On the Other Hand
,
adults
have the experience and maturity necessary to foresee potential issues. it is
also
possible to say that
children
don't really know the appropriate boundaries so
adults
can help set appropriate boundaries for safety and discipline.
Moreover
,
Adults
are
also
more aware of legal implications because there are some
rules
from the government.
For instance
, they can ensure that school
rules
comply with education regulations and policies. In Conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that it is somewhat shared responsibility between both
adults
and
children
that could lead to more compliance with the
rules
. because if it was by Sole adult control over rule-making could lead to a disconnect between
rules
and students' perceptions, possibly causing resentment or non-compliance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • sense of responsibility
  • ownership
  • realistic
  • relevant
  • negotiation
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • experience
  • maturity
  • foresee
  • appropriate
  • boundaries
  • safety
  • discipline
  • legal implications
  • comply
  • education regulations
  • disconnect
  • resentment
  • non-compliance
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