Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

As a human being who wants to get fit from time to time,

sports

Use synonyms

play a big role to make us healthy. There are numerous

type

Fix the agreement mistake

types

show examples

sports

Use synonyms

this

Linking Words

world, yet, it can be divided into two sections, individual and

team

Use synonyms

sports

Use synonyms

While

Linking Words

there are still debates over which type is better, here I would like to describe my views on both types and choose which one is better. Swimming, tennis,

Correct word choice

and

show examples

even running are several

sports

Use synonyms

that consider

Change preposition

apply

show examples

individual

sports

Use synonyms

. In

this

Linking Words

type of

Use synonyms

sports

Fix the agreement mistake

sport

show examples

, our success is highly dependent on our performance and determination to achieve our goals. If the athletes want to be the winner, they must train harder than anyone else and set the goal as high as they can. Our achievements are not relying on outside factors.

For example

Linking Words

, Usain Bolt

Change preposition

apply

show examples

a runner from Jamaica, always comes to the training earlier and trains as hard as he could.

Therefore

Linking Words

he achieves several medals at the Olympics.

On the other hand

Linking Words

team

Use synonyms

sports

Use synonyms

such

Linking Words

as basketball and football count heavily on teamwork. Even though each individual has tremendous skills, if they cannot work as a

team

Use synonyms

, their

team

Use synonyms

will fail. As social creatures,

human

Add an article

a human

the human

show examples

cannot

Use synonyms

life

Replace the word

live

show examples

on their own, our

life

Use synonyms

will

be depends

Change the verb form

depend

show examples

on someone.

Therefore

Linking Words

, teamwork will be one of the

key

Change to a plural noun

keys

show examples

for us to survive not only in

sports

Use synonyms

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

but

also

Linking Words

in our entire

life

Use synonyms

. To summarize, both individual and

team

Use synonyms

sports

Use synonyms

have their own benefits,

however

Linking Words

, to achieve more in

sports

Use synonyms

and

also

Linking Words

in our

life

Use synonyms

, I rather

Remove the marker

apply

show examples

choose

team

Use synonyms

sports

Use synonyms

nadiasyifaaSat Jun 24 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

cooperation
team spirit
sense of belonging
community
leadership
trust
collective responsibility
dependency
self-reliance
self-discipline
goal setting
tailored development
flexibility
social support

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand? What measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?
Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. It is admitted that the amount of potable water is limited, especially with the explosion of the population. The main reason for the shortage of water is pollution, making the water supply less than the increasing demand. This phenomenon can be mitigated by collaboration among politicians and citizens.
7
band
Artificial Intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement?
Many believe that A.I. could take the place of teachers in the near future. This essay disagrees with this statement because computers are not advanced yet and students can effectively use online courses instead of attending class.
6
band
Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?
In the contemporary era, physical possession of assets and monetary value are among the most prevalent factors that determine a person's success level. It is my contention that although high economic status is an effective tool to measure success, there are some other alternative indicators such as physical shape, wisdom and discipline to address how accomplished a person is.
7.5
band
Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a persons culture and character from their choice of clothes do you agree or disagree?
It is certainly true that a person's choice of clothing can provide some insight into their cultural background and elements of their character. However, it would be an oversimplification to claim that we can make definitive judgements about an individual's identity and values based solely on their sartorial preferences.
6
band
Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays,many countries request people who work for a long average working time to improve the economy more effectively.Although I agree that working for a long time may help a company or enterprise improve performance, the employees could be more stressed during work,so this phenomenon that the enterprise as well as the government should take heed of.

Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand? What measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Artificial Intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement?

Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a persons culture and character from their choice of clothes do you agree or disagree?

Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?