Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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As a human being who wants to get fit from time to time,

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play a big role to make us healthy. There are numerous

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world, yet, it can be divided into two sections, individual and

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there are still debates over which type is better, here I would like to describe my views on both types and choose which one is better. Swimming, tennis,

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even running are several

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, our success is highly dependent on our performance and determination to achieve our goals. If the athletes want to be the winner, they must train harder than anyone else and set the goal as high as they can. Our achievements are not relying on outside factors.

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, Usain Bolt

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a runner from Jamaica, always comes to the training earlier and trains as hard as he could.

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he achieves several medals at the Olympics.

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team

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sports

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as basketball and football count heavily on teamwork. Even though each individual has tremendous skills, if they cannot work as a

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, their

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will fail. As social creatures,

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on their own, our

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on someone.

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for us to survive not only in

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in our entire

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. To summarize, both individual and

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have their own benefits,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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