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Nowadays, people prefer to shop in supermarkets rather than local stores. What are the reasons behind it? Is it a negative or positive development?

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At the present time, a lot of people choose shopping
centres
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 over small-scale traders to buy their basic needs primarily because of convenience and a wide variety of
products
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 to choose from. A supermarket is a one-stop shop place where all of your everyday needs are readily available.
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, because of the fast-paced lifestyle many families have today, buyers would choose to look for necessities in one place rather than going to different stores or
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. In highly urbanized cities for one, supermalls or
centres
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 where
supermarkets
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 are
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 located, can be found just a few blocks away from condominiums or even some residential areas. People can go there anytime with the convenience of an air-conditioned facility where goods are free from dirt and stinky smell.
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,
supermarkets
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 offer a wide variety of
products
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 and brands that local markets most often do not have. From fruits and vegetables, toiletries, electronics and gadgets, baby
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, home appliances, etc.,
supermarkets
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 can be equalled to mega shopping
centres
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 in that sense.
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,
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 a one-stop shop can be beneficial to the majority of the population, there are still minorities affected who need to be considered. Mega businesses and investments have a tremendous economic effect on the local market.
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 most
supermarkets
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 and
centres
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 sell imported
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 because of low-cost value and capital with a higher return on investment, some local small-scale businessmen and entrepreneurs are forced to close their businesses
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 no patronization or bankruptcy.
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, when China's
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 entered the Philippine market in the late 1990s, a lot of shoe-manufacturing businesses in Marikina closed down because of the fact that China can produce in mass and yet can sell footwear at a much lower price. In conclusion,
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supermarkets
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 have contributed to ease and convenience, let us not forget the negative economic effect on the local market.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Variety
  • Economies of scale
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Purchasing power
  • Perishable items
  • High turnover rates
  • Quality controls
  • Local economy
  • Diversity
  • Community feel
  • Personal touch
  • Carbon footprint
  • Environmentally friendly
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