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Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that space programmes should continue no matter what the cost. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

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In recent decades, the amount of
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 spent on
space
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programmes
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 has been increasing significantly, causing some public controversy.
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 some people believe
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 exploration’s costs are too high, I side with those who believe that these
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 are highly beneficial to humanity and,
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, worth the cost. On the one hand, it could be argued that the benefits we gain from expensive
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programmes
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 are not worth the cost.
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, opponents of
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 exploration believe it costs their countries billions of dollars to recruit, train and pay for astronomers
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 there are not any clear benefits for ordinary people. They argue that it would be more practical to spend the
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 on essential sectors
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 as education, health care and transportation to raise the citizens’ living standards.
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, human beings on Earth are facing severe issues,
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 as famine, natural disasters, pollution or terrorism, which require immediate action. If the
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 were reallocated to solve these problems, a large number of human
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 would be saved.
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, I side with those who are of the opinion that it is worth continuing
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programmes
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 regardless of cost. One of the reasons, I would argue, is that the advanced technology which has been developed and used in
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 exploration does have practical applications in our daily
lives
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. A great example is GPS, which is used as the fundamental system to develop many applications in taxi and delivery services
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 as Uber or Grab.
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, satellites sent to
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space
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 can observe what is happening on Earth, and
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, can provide highly accurate forecasts about the weather and more importantly, the potential occurrence of natural disasters
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 as typhoons or devastating storms. Without these forecasts, a considerable number of human
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 would be at risk each year. In conclusion,
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money
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 spent on expensive
space
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programmes
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 could have practical uses on Earth, not only is
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 exploration beneficial to our daily
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 but
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 helps predict and prepare for unexpected situations.
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, I believe it is a wise decision to keep funding these
programmes
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.

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