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In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays some countries provide education and healthcare for free for their citizens, but the price for the
taxes
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 higher than in other countries. On the one ,side it is a good trend,
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however
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 there are some disadvantages. In
this
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 with, I will describe the advantages of
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 issue.
Firstly
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,
due to
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people
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's psychology, it is better to pay higher
taxes
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 each month , than to save
money
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 themselves.
People
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 better spend
money
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 to entertain themselves
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 some events or buying expensive
thing
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. Unfortunately,
people
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 rarely think about their future health problems or studying . So, higher
taxes
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 and services for free can be a good solution.
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, different medical services are high in price ,
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 in my country the price for magnetic resonance imaging or CT scan is more than 100 euro and not every country dweller can allow
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 so big amount of
money
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 on medical examinations.
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, some important medical conditions are not found and
people
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 die. So, higher
taxes
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 , maybe, will help to make that kind of
services
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service
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 more available for
people
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.
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, some disadvantages exist too.
For instance
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,
people
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 have no choice . Even if they don'
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 want to pay , they should. Some
people
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 don'
t
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 have problems with health or they don'
t
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 have children to educate , so for them, paying extra
money
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 every month will be
the
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 waste of
money
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. In conclusion , I feel that
advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages. I think that
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 is to pay more
money
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 every month and be sure that if something happens I will have good care for free and my family shouldn'
t
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 spend all their
money
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 helping me. The same is with
the
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education. So, my opinion is that
this
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 trend
have
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 a lot of good sides.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equitable access
  • Public health
  • Literacy rates
  • Social inequalities
  • Government accountability
  • Standard of living
  • Financial burden
  • Taxpayers
  • Government inefficiency
  • Quality of services
  • Competition
  • Personal responsibility
  • Self-reliance
  • Overreliance
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