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Newspaper have an enormous influence on peoples opinion and ideas do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

#newspaper #influence #peoples #situation
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It is an irrefutable fact that the newspaper has a phenomenal impact on building and moulding the outlooks of the readers. I believe that it is
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 a healthy stitch. Hereby, I will discuss my opinion in detail
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 relevant examples. Beyond doubt, the newspaper is the
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 means of mass communication throughout the world.
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 is because it is not only affordable but
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 available in areas where full-fledged technology is absent.
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, in some countries , South Africa there are frequent power cuts which lead to disruption of Wi-Fi connection every now and
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 making it quite unreliable.
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, the newspaper fetches news from all over the globe which is
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 arranged under appropriate headings
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 as sports section, cooking section, celebrity section and many more.
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, keeping the public even more engaged in it.
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, the printing press provides information regarding various available jobs
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 the required criteria.
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 helps people ,especially those from the lower socio-economic class to
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, business tycoons use newspapers to advertise their products as it is the most effective way to convince people about the necessity of that item in their lives.
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, it is
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government departments like police either to spread the word regarding a missing person or to warn laymen about various frauds and fraudsters around them.
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, newspapers have enormous benefits to offer starting from bringing news from around the world to highlighting job opportunities
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, considering all these factors I totally emphasise newspapers as a positive influence.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph supports the main argument and contributes to the overall logical structure of the essay.
task achievement
Provide a clear and focused response to the essay prompt, addressing both the positive and negative aspects of the influence of newspapers on people's opinions and ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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