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There are more cars on the roads these days and more accidents. As a result, some politicians have suggested that people should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single test.What do you think are the advantages of repeat driving tests? Do these outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to
 the advancement of technology, there are so many motor vehicles on the road nowadays which leads to
accidents
. Eventually, certain politicians dees that individuals
to
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take driving
tests
 in their lives on a regular basis
instead
 of one single test. I totally agree with
this
 notion because of the reasons I will discuss
further
. Commencing with the pros of taking regular driving
tests
 which is it can lead to more information for people regarding the rules and regulations as sometimes people pass their test but they are not much about the rules. They get confused in some cases
such
 as during the intersection passes.
Moreover
, it can result in fewer
accidents
 as these days many older individuals drive the car even though they have weak eyesight, because of which
accidents
 occur. But, if they take the test and they are not eligible to drive the car they will not get the license.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by the Canadian Driving School which showed that more than 60% of
accidents
 happen to the elderly generation.
Thus
, I believe that taking
tests
 regularly has more benefits.
On the other hand
, it
also
 has some cones which is
waste
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 of time as people in
this
 modern era, are very busy with their work and do not have much time to take
tests
 again and again. which somehow creates stress for them
as well as
 it can results in more living expenses and cost.
However
, I still believe that taking
tests
 is more beneficial as the life of someone is much more important than any other kind of expense.
Therefore
, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of
this
 situation.
To conclude
, the cost of taking
tests
 and the time it takes are the disadvantages of
this
 situation but it can not be denied that the life of someone is more precious than all these which can be saved by the repetition of driving
tests
 throughout their lives.
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Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction that clearly outlines the main points to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Relevant examples such as the Canadian Driving School survey are used to support your arguments.
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