WRITING TASK • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Both maps display the plan of a public
park
, in 1920 and how it developed today.
Overall
, the public
park
has two entrances, one from the north
side
on Arnold Avenue, and
while
other from the south
side
on Eldon Street. There are many changes that happened,
however
, the rose
garden
on the north
side
next to the first entrance remains the same.
To begin
with the centre of the
park
there was a fountain which has now been replaced with a new rose
garden
, and all the seats in the corners were removed and relocated around the new rose
garden
that you can find in the middle of the
park
when you enter the
park
. Another rose
garden
in the southwest of the
park
was demolished completely,
while
on the west there was a stage for musicians converted into the amphitheatre for concerts.
Following
this
, on the right
side
from the north of the
park
, a rose
garden
and pond for water plants were removed and constructed a new cafe and area for children to play. On the southeast, a class house converted into a water feature is next to a third new entrance for people who come from the underground car
park
.
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Including more specific examples about the changes in the park can further demonstrate the depth of your analysis.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear comparison of the two time periods and describes the main changes accurately.
coherence and cohesion
Overall, the essay demonstrates good organization and logical sequencing of ideas.
language
The use of language generally conveys ideas effectively with only minor inaccuracies.

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