Rich countries often give money to poorer countries but is does not solve poverty. Therefore , develop countries should guve other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is not uncommon for developed countries to facilitate financial aid to poorer people.

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, it is often argued that poverty cannot be lessened through financial support only. It can be more useful for developing nations if they

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offer other types of benefits. I partially agree with the given notion. Apparently, Financial grant in developing nations holds a wide range of constructive benefits,

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with, It helps to promote long-term prosperity and the establishment of political institution.

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, some less developed regions do not have the ability to maximise their's rich natural resources, but with foreign ,support

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seems to be possible.

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, the UK government donated £241 million to Nigeria to obtain advanced technology for sanitation.

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, foreign aid helps rebuild lives by providing livelihoods and housing right after a disaster so that victims can start over. To exemplify, It has been reported in a recent survey that Syria has received more than €37 billion in humanitarian aid to Syrian and vulnerable host communities inside Syria and the region.

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, Advanced states can

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take positive steps to directly benefit underdeveloped countries. Especially, by taking action against corrupt leaders, assisting research and development and enhancing global labour mobility.

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, wealthy nations have more money to sustain their nationals even during economic crises

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as inflation. They should consider forgiving the poor country's exciting debts.

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, economically developing communities can use debt money in a productive way.

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, there is another way to help the world's poor states simply by being a consumer.

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can be done by buying products from websites that donate a portion of their proceeds to charity.

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, developing land has been suffering from brutal poverty and

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cannot be eliminated over a night but every effort can surely cassette deprivation.

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