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People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parents bring them up. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In most of the country, their
first
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 place is given for childcare. All over the world
parents
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 are thinking about their
child
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's
future
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 success. I totally agree with
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 topic. when a
child
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's bone he doesn't know about the world. His
first
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 word is Mom. Mom is taking his hand and teaching him everything.
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, his
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 teacher is his mom. If
parents
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 teach good values to their
children
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, it is nearly impossible for them to go astray when they grow up.
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, if
parents
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 encourage them to work hard and dream big, they will most probably achieve great things in
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. All
parents
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 want to see their
children
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's successful
future
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 than theirs.
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Parents
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 can influence their studies and guide them to achieve their targets
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 schooling time
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 they will be graduated one day.
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, If the
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 were separated and they don't care about their
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 it will be created crimes or drug-addicted
children
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. They had no one to show them the right path during their childhood and
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, they chose the path of their
parents
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.
Children
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 neglected or abused by their
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 are
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 more likely to get into crime.
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,
children
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 are going to school but not studying properly rather than who influence their
child
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 in hometime.
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, we can see all successful
children
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 have good parenting and good guidance in society. Most people's behaviours are different
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 when
children
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 learn good habits in their childhood it will be coming out from their younger age. Every
child
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 needs love and care. They need someone to hold their hand and motivate them in their lifetime. They need someone to show them what is right and wrong.
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, they will destroy before they bloom. In conclusion,
parents
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 should play a crucial role model and make the
future
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 and personality of their
children
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. They are the
first
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 and foremost influence on their
children
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 and as
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 it is their responsibility to ensure that they are guiding them on the right path. It is called
parent
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the parent
a parent
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