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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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 is expenditure a significant amount of funds to detect life on alternative planets. Some individuals believe that lawmakers should spend
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money
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 to tackle the
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 of
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 rather than wasting
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space
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researches
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. I totally agree with
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waste time and
money
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 and do not beneficial for ordinary
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. To being with, there are several reasons why I believe the
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pojects
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projects
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waste
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time
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 and
money
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.
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, exploration of outer
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 to find out
a new planets
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new planets
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 to
life
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 in it is considered
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extremely expensive.
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 is because scientists need to design
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spacecraft
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 deal with extreme conditions of outer
space
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 namely high, pressure,temperature,
gravity
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, which
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this
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indicate they need to use expensive materials to build
spacecarfts
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spacecraft
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,
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the
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astronauts to outer
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 can have
a negative impacts
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in
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 their health,
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 some researchers
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 can
leads
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 to
increase
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their
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a
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chance to develop serious diseases like
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 heart attack ,and cancer.
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, the if the governments
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space
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 programs,
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 can discourage researchers to focus to solve the
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earth
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such
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,
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 global warming, climate change,
pollution
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and pollution
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.
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 the fact that
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 supporting
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 exploration projects will
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reduce the amount of
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 allocated to addressing environmental
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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, the government should spend these dollars in order
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the
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crucial infrastructure
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 as
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 healthcare, education,
public
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and public
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 transport in order to improve
living
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the living
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 standards of
people
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instead
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 of
space
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pojects
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projects
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
space
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researches
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 is
waste
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a waste
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 of
money
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, and
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this
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these
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 funds should spend to tackle
earth
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earth's
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 environmental
issues
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 namely, global warming, climate change,
pollution
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and pollution
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, and
also
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 to enhance vital infrastructure In order to improve
people
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 living standards.

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