The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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is expenditure a significant amount of funds to detect life on alternative planets. Some individuals believe that lawmakers should spend
these
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money
to tackle the
issues
of
people
rather than wasting
money
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space
researches
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. I totally agree with
this
statement, because
space
programs
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waste time and
money
and do not beneficial for ordinary
people
. To being with, there are several reasons why I believe the
space
pojects
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projects
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waste
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a waste
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time
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and
money
.
Firstly
, exploration of outer
space
to find out
a new planets
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new planets
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to
life
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in it is considered
is
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extremely expensive.
This
is because scientists need to design
spacecrafts
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spacecraft
can
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deal with extreme conditions of outer
space
namely high, pressure,temperature,
gravity
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, which
this
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indicate they need to use expensive materials to build
spacecarfts
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spacecraft
.
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,
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the
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astronauts to outer
space
can have
a negative impacts
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in
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their health,
according to
some researchers
this
can
leads
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to
increase
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their
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a
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chance to develop serious diseases like
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heart attack ,and cancer.
Secondly
, the if the governments
funding
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space
programs,
this
can discourage researchers to focus to solve the
issues
in
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earth
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such
as
,
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global warming, climate change,
pollution
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.
This
is
due to
the fact that
,
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supporting
space
exploration projects will
can
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reduce the amount of
money
allocated to addressing environmental
issues
in
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earth
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Earth
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.
Finally
, the government should spend these dollars in order
develop
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the
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crucial infrastructure
such
as
,
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healthcare, education,
public
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transport in order to improve
living
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standards of
people
instead
of
space
pojects
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projects
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
space
researches
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is
waste
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a waste
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of
money
, and
this
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these
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funds should spend to tackle
earth
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environmental
issues
namely, global warming, climate change,
pollution
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and pollution
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, and
also
to enhance vital infrastructure In order to improve
people
living standards.
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