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Question: education is the single most important factor in the development of a country. Do you agree?

#education #factor #development #country
Education is a vital part of a person's life. It is said to be the most important thing for the development, not just of a person, but
also
 of a country. In my opinion, studying is the first step to a brighter future.
To begin
 with, there are 3 things that education can hone a person.
Firstly
, it would give you knowledge. Thru studying, people would learn about numbers, words, and even recent events that they could use in their everyday life.
For instance
, math subject
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 could mould your arithmetic skills that would bring benefits when purchasing things.
Furthermore
, inputs about certain information will help you not to be scammed by opportunistic individuals.
Secondly
, it will enhance your skills. With all the practical teachings and exams you will do in school, surely, you will be capable to face the harsh reality of the world.
For example
, nowadays, cooking is already part of the curriculum of some students.
This
 gives them the proper ways of cooking even just simple meals. In
this
 way, they could use it to help their parents at home or when they move to another city by themselves. They would be able to survive without thriving much.
Last
 but not least is that it will develop your attitude. Being in school is not just
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 about subjects and practical things. They
also
 teach you good manners and right conduct. To illustrate, in the Philippines, one of their subject in school is etiquette.
This
 gives students awareness of the right ways to react in a proper way. Thru
this
, they would be able to interact with other people in an acceptable manner. To recapitulate, education is very significant to everyone. It gives you knowledge, skills and attitude that will be your tool to face the reality of the world. It will prepare you for any circumstances may it be good or bad.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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