Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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reason some
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government
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the government
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have to ban dangerous
sports
,
however
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others think that
people
should have
freedom
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the freedom
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to do any
sports
or activities.In
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some
people
think that combat
sports
cause
to
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force or any criminal things,
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I believe that
this
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idea.Because in my point of
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every behaviour
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on
people
's
psycology
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psychology
.Fight
sports
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for
self defence
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not damage to others,but if a
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psychology
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person
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then
he or she
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them for adverse.Of
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may be some
sports
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not seem like for
self defence
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such
as boxing,but none of
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arts must utilize
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hurt someone.
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some bad accident
happen
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in a
person
's life and he
want
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to revenge,
however
when he or she
starting
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to go to combat
storts
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sports
,they comprehend that martial arts
is
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not for revenge,of
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there is
significant
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the significant
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role
of
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trainer in teaching true way.
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kid,Mr.Lowrense's sansei was not
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character because he teach to violence and he said no mercy.I mean everything
depend
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on
person
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and
person's
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psycology
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psychology
.Some
people
believe that everyone should have
freedom
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the freedom
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to do any activities or
sports
,I completely agree with
this
idea. In conclude that,in my point of view
the
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martial arts
are play
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an essencial
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essencial
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essential
role in our life and I completely believe that everybody must use them for
self defence
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and health.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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