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The graph shows average Household expenditure in 2019 and 2020.

The graph shows average Household expenditure in 2019 and 2020.
#household #expenditure
The given two
pie
 charts illustrate the average spending on households in a year. It's noticeable that expenditure on
food
 shows a large
amount
 of household
pie
while
 education makes up the smallest
pie
of
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the
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chart in 2020. 55% of
food
 accounted for the first chart which was in 2019. The second chart below showed 41%
food
pie
. In 2019 the lowest expend there was 5% which belonged to
the
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healthcare.
However
, in 2020 the healthcare
amount
 raised by 15%
while
food
 decreased from 55% to 41%. In the first year, the other products and services
pie
 was the smallest one that
make up
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 7%, but the
amount
 changed to 18%., housing expenditure was 20% and it was a negligible
amount
 namely it reduces by a per cent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, food, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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