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The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.
The charts provide information on the proportion of the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in 5 categories,
teather
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tether
, restaurant,
museuns
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museums
,
anual
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annual
 events and others. Whenever information
range
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 into two periods from 2006 and 2016.
Overall
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 , it is clear to see that there
are
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 a huge increase for restaurant reason. The biggest difference between the time period is observed in 2016, where the choice
around
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of
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 restaurants rose fourfold
relationed
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relative
with
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to
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 2006. Another noticeable contrast goes for
museuns
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museums
 and
anual
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annual
 events,
while
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 in 2006 were 27% and 45%
,
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apply
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 after that
droped
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dropped
 to 11% and 32% respectively.
Furthermore
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, the
porcentage
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percentage
 of teather
reason
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reasons
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 decrease a
litle
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little
, just 5%
comparedto
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compared to
 the
first year
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evaluate
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. There is
also
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 no
an
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apply
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expressive difference among other choices with 5% to 8%. In summary, the two charts clearly show that all reasons
was
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were
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 changed, and, the most
stands
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stand
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 out is
restaurante
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restaurant
restaurants
 and the less is the
others
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 types of induce.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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